Check my response to your rough draft. Please be reminded to read something posted below, a Warning about the rough draft grade. Read the response to the rough draft, paying almost no attention to the rough draft grade itself.
Response to APA Rough Draft from professor: (The numbers he’s referring to will be listed below and the APA rough draft will be attached separately.)
— your paper should not discuss pros and cons. Argue from the correct side; don’t write to decide
I am not going to count bold font headings during the paper as part of a paper. Bold is never correct. Headings are never correct.
Pros and cons have not been correct in Eng 112 since Journal #1. Specifically, the Abstract two weeks ago was a reminder about arguing for the topic you chose.
Rule #7 is a big problem in what you have sent.
Rule #1 is a big problem. Headers required for titles. Creativity is too.
You also have too much word count.
Larger family sizes have advantages and disadvantages depending on various influencing factors. —– this is not the argument and not the paper you need. Smaller family sizes hurt society; your topic says so; you chose the topic.
The paper quotes just once, far from enough.
This would be a low F next week. Please fix as much as you can. Let me know if you have any questions.
2. Check your paper for parentheses citing sources, References formatting, ABC order on the References page, the “no you” rule, consistent quoting, naming people as a habit, identifying an opponent, argument, grammar, etc., all in accordance with my feedback to your rough draft. NOTE: the Final Draft is considered complete with 5-8 sources and 1,000-1,100 words.
3. View the video below before improving your paper.
4. Please let me know if you have any questions. After addressing your paper, do not send until you have proofread. Proofreading tends to require re-reading more than just once or even twice. You should re-read your paper in order and from bottom to top, as well as random sequences at a time. Please send your Final Draft on/before next Sunday.
1. is the word count 1,000-1,100 words? The References page does not count. The APA Folder rule #1 title in a header does not count.
2. does the paper cite 5-8 sources?
3. does the paper list those 5-8 sources on the References page?
Because a student could send a correct paper that is too short, perhaps 700 words with 4 sources, due perhaps to the student having a busy week, that student has to receive a “quantity grade”; the student has 80% of the research for 70% of the word count. That means the student would make an F rough draft grade. Otherwise, the student may have made no mistakes at all. But it’s an F.
On the other hand, a student may send a 1,050 word paper with 7 sources, 7 sources listed and cited with parentheses. That student would make a 99 grade, but if my comments point out misspellings, subject/verb disagreement, sentence structure, no quoting, “no you” violations, etc., the paper is poor quality. A student receiving a 99 rough draft grade has to act on my comments, not the grade; the grade is not related to how well a Final Draft with the same mistakes would score.
The Short Folder for all APA Essays and the APA Annotated Bibliography
1. Create creative titles
A paper on Jack London’s “To Build a Fire” should not be entitled Jack London or “To Build a Fire”. It should be entitled what you are saying about either or both, creatively, in the paper. This goes for rough drafts for which you would have a working title. Please do not decorate your titles with CAPS, larger font, italics, quotation marks, or underlining. Your title should be the same font as the rest of the paper. For your APA essays, place the title in a header at left margin. For the APA Annotated Bibliography, those 2 words, centered, should be the title.
2. Commas go inside quotation marks
For example: When I read “The Red Convertible,”
When I read “The Red Convertible”,
3. Title treatment
Poems, articles, essays, and short stories go in quotation marks AND books, movies, newspapers, TV shows and magazines should be italicized. Nothing goes in quotation marks and with italics. Every paper we write will involve not only the title we are writing about collectively, but “Case Study” titles as well.
FOR APA research protocol:
4. Periods go after – only after – parentheses.
5. Periods go after, but quotation marks go before the parentheses.
6. Space before writing your MLA parentheses.
7. No parentheses belong in a research paper except APA parentheses.
8. Use keywords inside those parentheses. Entire titles and entire names are not necessary. When an author’s last name is available, always use that author’s last name as the keyword. Also it is conventional to use a comma and then a year of publication in parentheses. When there can be confusion on the Works Cited page regarding your keyword, choose one that would avoid the confusion.
9. Page numbers are included in parentheses for sources with page numbers.
10. Here is the Works Cited model for a one author book:
Theroux, P. Dark Star Safari. Boston: Mariner Books, 2004.
Author, last name first. First initial. Book Title. Place of Publishing Company: Publishing Company, Year of Publication. Indent second lines if they exist, which in the above example does not apply.
11. Here is a Works Cited model for an Internet page. Note that there are three (only 3) mandatory elements to be included for any web page, although some pages also have authors, sponsors, and dates of update:
Title of Web Page in NOT in Quotation Marks. (Year of Publication.) Retrieved from
Another example, this time of a “stacked” web page (one with an author, sponsor, and date of update):
Randerson, J. Childish Superstition: Einstein’s letter makes view of religion relatively clear. The Guardian. (2008.) Retrieved from
12. Last word: Not only should your entire paper be in the same font, all of your Works Cited should be in the same font. When copying and pasting long web addresses on to your Works Cited page, the next step if necessary may be to highlight the whole paper and choose only one type and one size font.
APA Rough Draft is attached separately.