Introduction:  Missing Hook.  The first mention of the author you must have a full

Introduction:  Missing Hook.  The first mention of the author you must have a full name.

The thesis is good, but your Response could be stronger > how or why?

MLA > missing signal phrases.  Line not capitalized.

Body 1 > feels more like a summary.  What is YOUR point?  Need stronger Topic and Concluding.

Body 2 > you need to be Thesis driven, not plot-driven.

Conclusion > Needs to begin with Restatement of Thesis.  Overall better with a sense of analysis.  No clear connection to Hughes and his purpose or method in this poem.