Who Done it?

Could you use these new writing requirements to expand on your answer you have already given me?
Here is the assignment: For this writing task, you’ll need to respond to the following scenario:
Who are you?You work as department head in the information technology (IT) department at First Federal Bank. Part of your job is to conduct an ongoing assessment of risk for the institution and to recommend proper controls. Banking systems should be able to quickly collect and edit information, summarize results, and promptly correct any errors. You have identified a possible threat to “timeliness” of information.You have received reports from tellers that customers have been complaining more often lately of bounced checks. They have been bringing in their checkbook ledgers and bank statements, and there have been a consistent and steady stream of complaints about deposits made between 1 p.m. and 2 p.m. that do not seem to post to accounts by the end of the business day.You have conducted an examination and feel befuddled since you just installed a new system that advertised itself as quick, accurate, and reliable. This is terrible! The system cost a lot of money and you fought hard for it. You researched and recommended this system and pushed for it because it had so many internal controls and neat features for the bank and its tellers. It has decreased time by five minutes to complete closing procedures and it runs an auto-save every hour, which saves an additional step for the tellers. You have spent a lot of time training the staff and have put up with a lot of teasing about the aches and pains of new technology. You feel badly for the new tellers, many of whom are older, because the bank has hired more part-timers with experience; but you feel confident that once the tellers get used to this system they will really like it.”Don’t sweat it,” says Whitney, your co-worker. “It’s not the bank’s fault about the bounced checks. You know people–they complain all the time. You see our new ad campaign, ‘Play Nice?’ Well, where do you think that came from? People just like to blame their mistakes on the bank and get ugly with us.”You passed it off as that until yesterday when your own check bounced. You take advantage of the bank policy of no fees for bounced checks for employees, and then you get into gear!What’s happening today?You conduct an “information flow audit” and then a “technology audit.” You discover that many of the tellers have been running the 2 p.m. reconciliation procedures in the incorrect order. Instead of running close, register, consolidate/merge, and then post, many tellers have been running close, register, post, ending with consolidate/merge. The problem is, once the teller hits the post button, there is nothing to consolidate and merge! You also discover that the prompt screen for consolidate/merge has not been consistently appearing and that the tellers assumed that, because the system did not ask them to deal with it, the system was doing it automatically–especially since it does so many other things automatically!Some of the more experienced tellers have said that on the rare occasion when the screen did appear, they couldn’t see the icon very well and admitted that it’s possible they didn’t place the cursor squarely on the icon when they clicked the mouse.You take this issue to your boss, Terry Woodall, who is horrified and instructs you to “get on it right away.” You get your IT team on the problem and fix the system by (1) insuring the correct prompt screen appears and by (2) enlarging the consolidate/merge icon and placing it in a more prominent area of the screen.What do you need to do?You tell your boss you have fixed the technical problem. She asks that you, as department head of IT, communicate to the tellers how IT has fixed the problem and what the tellers need to do. This information will be posted in the break room and also be circulated immediately to the tellers. Craft the body of that document.Develop a response that includes examples and evidence to support your ideas, and which clearly communicates the required message to your audience. Organize your response in a clear and logical manner as appropriate for the genre of writing. Use well-structured sentences, audience-appropriate language, and correct conventions of standard American English.
Your first answer is attached Below
Here are new writing requirements for this assignment:Format Requirements – Please use 12pt Times New Roman, single-space, double-space between paragraphs, 1-inch top and bottom margins, 1-inch left and right margins. Note that when you copy and paste your essay from a Word document into MindTap, your formatting is likely to change. Please make sure to adjust it manually, especially spacing between paragraphs. The space between each paragraph should not be greater than the space between paragraphs in these guidelines. If bullet points will not transfer, use hyphens instead.
5. Positive Message – This assignment contains an extensive scenario which should be followed carefully when writing your message. However, if you would like to include any additional information to clarify your message, you are more than welcome to do so. You may make up any additional information you’d like. Please make sure to analyze your audience and reasons for writing, as discussed in the 3×3 writing process (pg. 133 in your textbook). Information in paragraphs should flow in a logical order. For ex.: Don’t begin discussing an issue, then jump to an apology, and then return to describe the solution. Rather, begin conveying the good news, then return to describe the issue, what caused it, what have you done specifically to mitigate the issue and avoid its reoccurrence in the future (repeat up to this point with each issue discussed separately), then include an apology if appropriate (you should not just say: Sorry, this won’t happen again), restore confidence of the recipients in your institution and software, request feedback, and end with a pleasant closing.
Based on the scenario, bank tellers may not have any IT background and may have no information regarding software issues. They also had to deal with upset customers because of you, the IT Head. It is your task to restore their confidence in the bank’s software and reassure them that this mishap will not happen again. However, do not merely state that it will not happen again but explain what changes you actually made to correct the mistakes. Make sure to explain everything in detail. Do not assume that they know and fully understand the information you’re trying to convey.
6. Persuasive Message – The assignment itself is very short; therefore, you will have to create any additional information for your essay. Feel free to use your imagination but remember to use only professional language and be very specific. Same rules and writing tips apply as stated above.
You are basically writing a news article addressed to past and future patrons of this restaurant. Your primary audience is the patrons, but you have a secondary audience of anybody who will read this news article; therefore, even more extensive explanation is necessary to restore confidence in your restaurant. I cannot emphasize enough that the reader may not know what happened and therefore you shouldn’t expect them to fully understand what information you’re trying to convey.
7. Additional writing tips: The essays must be written in a highly professional language and contain 1.5 – 2 pages (800-900 words). “Short and sweet” essays will not be sufficient. As a matter of fact, essays with 1-2 short paragraphs usually received an unsatisfactory grade (F). Please follow the writing rules discussed in Chapters 8 and 10 regarding Positive and Persuasive messages, and the 3×3 writing process. Remember that sentences should contain no more than 20 words each. Also, you should review the Writing Rubric posted on Moodle to get a general idea of criteria based on which the essay will be graded.
Please be certain to use professional language: any slang, or idioms should be avoided. Business writing is different from what you’ve likely experienced in an English writing class. It is more structured, straightforward, and plain. Your essay should sound conversational but professional. Thoughts should be organized logically, follow a chronological order, and explain everything based on the scenario extensively. Do not assume that the reader knows what you are trying to say. Instead explain it more extensively and specifically. After reading your essay, the recipient of your message should not have any further questions.
Most importantly, if you have any questions or if you are uncertain about anything, please do not hesitate to ask before submitting your essay. If you need help with paraphrasing correctly, please read pages 414-415 The Fine Art of Paraphrasing. It is located in Chapter 11, Section 4: Documenting Information, Sub-Heading: The Fine Art of Paraphrasing.